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So many questions going through my head, So many letters I wrote,
unsent and unread. So many answers I'd love to hear, So many times I've wished you were hear. Always confused, Always lost, Always disappointed. I dreamt I was holding your hand again, You whispered in my ear like you used to. Lips touch, Hearts flutter, Love soars. You said I was an angel, sent from heaven just for you, You said I was the one, the only, special. You broke down the walls I had built around myself, You're the only one who can. So I poured out my heart to you, &

love?

by *MissCelia

Zarathustras-Crown from #project-improve here, apologies on the lateness of the response we're just getting set up in the new grou...

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A kiss so tender, it breaks the skin. A touch so caring, it must be sin. A whisper so soft, it shakes the earth. A look so loving, it makes you hurt.

A Kiss So Tender

by *Matthileo

You've got a great piece here, this isn't about length but rather the conciseness in which you convey the idea. Simple nurse...

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Prisoners Of War

by *losingmyfaith

This moving piece, as written by *losingmyfaith seems to almost set up the very impetus which would lead a person to choose such a name...

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I'm in love with the sea, with the ocean, the waves; they all remind me of deep waters, of harsh times and beauty.
I'm in love with the salty taste, the gentle breeze and the soft dusk sun; they remind me of the innocence I once held so dear to me.
I'm in love with the sand, tickling my toes in its twisted game, with the seaguls and the seashells; they're like my long faded memories.
I'm in love with the seaweeds, with the cold summer raindrops that wash my heart pure and leave nothing behind.
I'm in love with the sea, &

Of Waves

by *Amaya16

This beautifully written piece by *Amaya16 is simply entitled "of waves". It consists of the piecing together of 5 distinct stanzas in...

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I had my eye on the finish line, About to finish in record time, Then you came and erased it.
And I thought my dreams were within reach, And I was going to fulfil each, But you showed me they meant nothing.
I thought I was a successful breed, And that you'd let me succeed. But you quickly pulled me out like a weed.
And I thought we had buried the hatchet forever, Until you showed me we'd be enemies forever When you changed on me like the weather.

NEVER MADE IT BECAUSE OF YOU

by *charminator

This poem is, I feel, an honest, heartfelt piece and in every way I can feel that the core is as personally meaningful to the author as...

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simply the single most painful expression of my life living within the boundaries, of fiction's reality indulged with the realization of the romanticism
Romantic, a word i am not.
More along the lines of pathetic drizzled with the essences of many failed attempts.
Sly, Smooth and Suave a mixture of simplistic Sounds never describing myself
Dexterous, Graceful, dedicated sizzling to the senses as i burn my soul's essence a solution to the single most painful expression of my life
Talented, sequences of syllables
flowing gracefully over t

romantic

by ~Dari-Ra

This poem is a 5 stanza free form written from an interesting perspective. The intro begins with a cold start which pulls the reader i...

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